- Jul 7, 2017
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It's one of the best games here! I got the first picture. 
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This looks like what Dustborn developers really wanted to make
- Oct 18, 2020
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My only gripes with the game...is my own dumbass for not reading the tag that said kinetic novel, and was feeling frustrated there's no option to make any decisions. And then I came here and saw the "kinetic novel" tag. My bad.
I actually like the characters designs, and how they are written.
I actually like the characters designs, and how they are written.
The concept is interesting, but the art could use A LOT of work. I get the Atlantis movie art style, but it looks more like an AI tried to replicate it. Also, the creators should look into how to present text in a good way
and not like this example sentence, for ease of reading.
and not like this example sentence, for ease of reading.
- Feb 6, 2020
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Aw, bummed this is a kinetic novel. The character creator and varied cast look interesting but not having control over any interactions is a deal breaker for me.
As I progress into the story I realize that it is very well written. Sweet, caring and full of empathy. That is in stark contrast to all the ill will and hateful comments it has drawn initially.
In the meantime most of that was cleaned up by the moderators and I wish to thank them for that!
We have to stay vigilant though - the trolls are still out there...
In the meantime most of that was cleaned up by the moderators and I wish to thank them for that!
We have to stay vigilant though - the trolls are still out there...
I love to see variety, and queer positive adult games are a ridiculous rarity. Its sweet and I appreciate it, but the art is holding it back. As an illustrator, I'd like to give a couple of small tips:
1:line consistency, when different drawings have very different line art styles and thickness, it can feel a bit off. Take the 4th preview picture, where the character on the left has much thicker and bolder lines than the one on the right. I'd suggest picking a general thickness for outer lines, and one or two for detail work, and staying at least close to those.
2: While we're on the topic of lines, I like the direction you were going with the rough brush you used, there are too many samesy clean edge low effort cartoon style games out there without a distinct style, but it can be a bit jarring in places. Something that could help is coloring the lines, simply by adding an adjustment layer or mask. You could simply make them a darker shade of whatever color they're bordering.
3: proportions, yeah I can clearly see a don bluth/Atlantis fan here, and I do like it, but I do prefer the more realistic/naturalistic shots over some of the more highly stylized character shots. The bathtub shot for instance looks great, in large part because it feels so grounded and real.
4: rendering, having at least some level of shading makes a WORLD of difference, and you did a good job on the sexy time scenes, but for head on character shots you should always have some basic shading. I'd also suggest getting away from the airbrush style shading, and shade with colors to create warmer (or colder) shadows.
Overal, really happy this is here and hope you'll do another project!
1:line consistency, when different drawings have very different line art styles and thickness, it can feel a bit off. Take the 4th preview picture, where the character on the left has much thicker and bolder lines than the one on the right. I'd suggest picking a general thickness for outer lines, and one or two for detail work, and staying at least close to those.
2: While we're on the topic of lines, I like the direction you were going with the rough brush you used, there are too many samesy clean edge low effort cartoon style games out there without a distinct style, but it can be a bit jarring in places. Something that could help is coloring the lines, simply by adding an adjustment layer or mask. You could simply make them a darker shade of whatever color they're bordering.
3: proportions, yeah I can clearly see a don bluth/Atlantis fan here, and I do like it, but I do prefer the more realistic/naturalistic shots over some of the more highly stylized character shots. The bathtub shot for instance looks great, in large part because it feels so grounded and real.
4: rendering, having at least some level of shading makes a WORLD of difference, and you did a good job on the sexy time scenes, but for head on character shots you should always have some basic shading. I'd also suggest getting away from the airbrush style shading, and shade with colors to create warmer (or colder) shadows.
Overal, really happy this is here and hope you'll do another project!
